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Shall I join you when you leave
Shall I die along side
Shall I cease to breathe
At the right hour shall I die

I still hear your words echoing through my head
They will forever haunt my mind
Those sickening words you said
That one killing line

Shall I hold your hand
Until it becomes cold
Shall I bury you in this land
Just waiting to grow old

I don’t want to watch you die
I don’t want you to get sick
You promised forever, yet clearly lied
And I can’t deal with this

Shall we spend eternity
Together in hell
Don’t you want to be with me
Until the last tolling bell

This world leaves me lonely
This world breeds my hate
Can’t you see the fine line of destiny
The destructive plans of fate

We were pulled together by some force
Only gravity can rip us apart
We were pushed into the same court
And I owe you my heart

With the words you throw around
The words you choose to say
I feel as if I may drown
And this be our last day

Blood is seeping through the bandage
Love is choking on this poison
My smiles turn to rage
Freezing up my bones

So scoop up my heart
Wipe away the dirt and pain
Look at the finished art
And tell me we’re not the same

I can’t get enough
This painful loving embrace
This burning, electrified rush
That look upon your face

You don’t have to force a smile
Like I usually do
You don’t have to go the extra mile
You just need to go a few

Walk to the grave
Walk to the field of the dead
I’ll watch you be brave
While thinking of the words you said

When I think of the life we’ve lived
And the one I dream to share
I wish I had more to give
And know it isn’t fair

But when I think of this death
The black hatred filling me to the brim
I hope for eternity of rest
A tranquil pool still left to swim

We don’t believe in the same things
I believe in the gods of paper
And you believe in the King of Kings
But all that could change later

Though my fear breeds from there
What if we don’t go to the same place
What if I get thrown deep into despair
And you get shown grace

Then our separation would be complete
Our death would sever us
Our story would be dirt deep
Our love turned to dust

Please don’t die and leave me
Please don’t get sick and make me wait
Don’t stop believing
Or I’ll drown in pain and hate

Let me leave first
Or I’ll choke on a longer, sadder death
I’ll starve or die of thirst
Until I claim rest, leaving nothing left
:shrug: finally got my writers block away, and wrote a three page poem in my notebook today >.<;
I guess it comes back when I need it haha :iconotlplz:
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:iconcontradictory55:
Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student Writer
:glomp: Awesome!
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you ^^
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome =D
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blue-eyed-dreamer93 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student Writer
amazing beautiful
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student General Artist
Oh thank you ^^
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happyjustbecause Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice job, I was reading/singing this aloud to get the full effect and it sounds quite beautiful.

The verses:

Then our separation would be complete
Our death would sever us
Our story would be dirt deep
Our love turned to dust

I really like, I love how that theme or motif or whatever is continued throughout the poem.

I also really liked these lines:

You don’t have to force a smile
Like I usually do
You don’t have to go the extra mile
You just need to go a few

Just very witty and creative lines, I don't know, I like them a lot =D.
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student General Artist
thank you so much ^^ I really enjoyed writing this one, and I wasn't sure the theme stayed with it the entire time. It was kind of difficult, because when I write, its usually not very planned and out and comes out so fast it doesn't make much sense to me until a little down the line when I look back on it. I'm really glad you liked it and hope it made you smile maybe :)
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theWitchofGrich Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012
this is so beautiful :D
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:iconshikyo-uchiha:
Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you very much ^^ <3
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AngelofLight03 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2012  Student Writer
I love this. Great job. :D
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