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I think of ways
To waste away
With this time left unpaid

I sit and reflect
On the breath in my chest
And the words left unsaid

I rot and writhe in darkness
My heart helpless and a mess
Filled with this sick unrest

I look up and see nothing
I look inside and see worse than nothing
I watch the lies and hear the sighs

The lonely breaths of emptiness
Into an empty world only I know
The one I created for myself

You may breach the castle walls
But the stone will never crumble
And the fortress will never fall

Who hears the cries of a helpless child
Who hears the cracking of a broken heart
Who hears the death of a dying smile

Watch the words twist in agony
Writhing upon the cold hard ground
Burning to ash like paper set to flame

A dead world unknown to others
Wrapped in words of hurt
And fires that burn forever

The plains of Hell never looked so heavenly
Inspired by My Own Hell by Five Finger Death Punch [link] and Pepper By The Butthole Surfers [link]
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Mariosonicanimefan Featured By Owner Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That us AWESOME
I even tried to sing it :XD:
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww thank you very much ^^
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Mariosonicanimefan Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Your welcome ^^
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Student Writer
It's desperately vivid... I like it =)
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Im glad you do ^^
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Contradictory55 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Student Writer
:glomp:
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Blaiseblue Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
<3 love it.
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay! ^^
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faerie37 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
Darkly and beautifully done..this I find lovely.
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Im glad you do :)
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kibarunner Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
Very good! I so love the lines "who hears the cracking of a broken heart, Who hears the death of a dying smile" So beautiful!
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! ^^
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sumersela Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
indeed, hell sometimes looks more of a paradise then heaven

love this !
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Im glad! It does yes!
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88SRENAISSANCE88 Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Professional General Artist
Amazing poem...
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much :)
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DameInDistress Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is gorgeous :love:
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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libertelyrique Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013
Very deep dan dark but I love this...your lyrical imagery paints a very vivid picture...well done! Nice job
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much! ^^
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013   Writer
Gr8 job on this poem! :)
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much ^^
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Si1VeR-ReBoRn Featured By Owner Feb 4, 2013   Writer
Ur welcome! :)
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Xanatos-Leo Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this...
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it ^^
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Xanatos-Leo Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
your very very welcome ^^ <3
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SageFillyLuna Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student General Artist
good god i love this. i absolutely love this. every word.
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Well thank you very much :) I think it sounds really good and deep read aloud ^^; I'm glad that you liked it ^^
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SageFillyLuna Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student General Artist
and thank you for the llama :)
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Shikyo-Uchiha Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome ^^
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